Shadow's Realm AU (Shadowpeach)

Writing Tips

Punctuating Dialogue

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➸ “This is a sentence.”

➸ “This is a sentence with a dialogue tag at the end,” she said.

➸ “This,” he said, “is a sentence split by a dialogue tag.”

➸ “This is a sentence,” she said. “This is a new sentence. New sentences are capitalized.”

➸ “This is a sentence followed by an action.” He stood. “They are separate sentences because he did not speak by standing.”

➸ She said, “Use a comma to introduce dialogue. The quote is capitalized when the dialogue tag is at the beginning.”

➸ “Use a comma when a dialogue tag follows a quote,” he said.

“Unless there is a question mark?” she asked.

“Or an exclamation point!” he answered. “The dialogue tag still remains uncapitalized because it’s not truly the end of the sentence.”

➸ “Periods and commas should be inside closing quotations.”

➸ “Hey!” she shouted, “Sometimes exclamation points are inside quotations.”

However, if it’s not dialogue exclamation points can also be “outside”!

➸ “Does this apply to question marks too?” he asked.

If it’s not dialogue, can question marks be “outside”? (Yes, they can.)

➸ “This applies to dashes too. Inside quotations dashes typically express—“

“Interruption” — but there are situations dashes may be outside.

➸ “You’ll notice that exclamation marks, question marks, and dashes do not have a comma after them. Ellipses don’t have a comma after them either…” she said.

➸ “My teacher said, ‘Use single quotation marks when quoting within dialogue.’”

➸ “Use paragraph breaks to indicate a new speaker,” he said.

“The readers will know it’s someone else speaking.”

➸ “If it’s the same speaker but different paragraph, keep the closing quotation off.

“This shows it’s the same character continuing to speak.”

When I was a new player of cookie run Kingdom a few years ago and was at the first stages of White Lily lore , I believed that the White Lily Gingerbrave and Co first met was simply another one instead of the other half of Dark Enchantress , I was following real life logic in my mind and thought that because cookies are baked in a bunch that there could be multiple cookies of the same appearance and flavor but could recognise each other by game logic

Later I understood that it's pretty rare and left to luck if cookies gain sentience and saw the rest of White Lily's lore but at the time I thought that a new White Lily was born (or simply already existed) to take the place of Dark Enchantress as the holder of the light of Freedom

Shadow's Realm AU

Prologue

Macaque always thought his birth was a rather lonely one

He appeared alone in a strange dark world , he didn't have any family members or primates like him near ...if there were at all

After all when he got a bit older and started to search for someone that could be part of his family , or at least someone of the same species , there was nobody

He was the only one , he was born in a dangerous place without anybody to protect him , care for him and teach him things like how to eat or what to do in case of danger

He had to learn all of that on his own ...it was a bit depressing for a child to grow up like that

He traveled place to place , found some villages , learned a few things like speech or walking on two legs looking at the demons on the street...not that he was entirely successful seeing as he's to used to go on four to break the habit anytime soon and his speech was at a baby's level of skill

He stole food from the merchants when he was hungry and stole clothes to mimic some fancy demon he saw walking and buying around the shops

Sometimes someone would see him but he was quick to jump in the shadows to hide or run away , a power he learned about one time when he randomly tripped and fell into a shadow

It was okay but it was still lonely , he didn't have any friends , even if he settled down in a village he was still a thief and kids his age tended to avoid him , either because their parents told them to or because of some bad rumors about him

His travels seemed like an hobby at that point but deep down he still hoped he could find someone to call family or even a friend

His wish was granted but in a very strange way , the world he lived had some random bright places , they looked like strange gold mirrors , he usually never got close to them because the demons in the village thought of them as dangerous but he run out of places to explore long ago so he gave them a shot

What he found , when looking in the mirrors , was another place , completely different from where he lived , it was so bright and interesting , it wasn't like anything he saw before , with his curiousity picked he tried to find a way to go to that place

He failed , many times , because he didn't know how so he settled to observe from the mirrors in hopes something interesting would happen

He wasn't disappointed , different mirrors showed different areas of that place

He saw a kingdom on the clouds , forests and jungles , different animals and beasts , demons so dull and harsh looking compared from the ones of his world

He looked and looked and looked around

After a while of doing the same thing for days and days , time passed until the day arrived for Sun Wukong to be born in the world

Macaque found Wukong coming out of a rock funny , as well as his personality but most of all he was delighted to find he wasn't the only one anymore , how couldn't he think of this before!? If he was the only one of his world maybe there would be another in the other

In his excitement he run between the mirrors trying not to lose the other monkey , Macaque really wanted to meet him but he still couldn't find a way for it

So he watched the other as the years passed , and one day when Sun Wukong was learning about his world and the Shadow's realm , the world Macaque lived in , by his master , Macaque got an idea

He understood how and why their worlds were divided like this , the how was because of a seal from Buddha , but if Wukong's master was right when they explained various kind of seals in one of their lessons , then there could be a way to go around it

If Macaque couldn't go personally then he needed a way to go over without his phisical body , another idea came when Wukong was learning about clones and astal projection

If Macaque could do something similar then maybe it could work , so he trained and focused his powers to create something , anything that could help him reach his goal

He tried to manipulate the shadows to create a shadow clone , one without sentience and trained to be able to put his mind in it and go around , then he would only need to test if the clones could travel to Wukong's world by the shadows , and prepare a place in his world where his body could rest while he was there

It took a lot of time and a lot of failed attemps before Macaque would finally succeed

In his excitement he came out directly of Wukong's shadow , startling the other monkey

When Wukong saw him he was at first wary then realized that he was looking at Macaque aka another primate like him and the wariness dissappeared to tackle Macaque in his own excitement

They were both curious and giddy about each other and spent the many later years always at each other side ...until that day

Wukong was punished by heaven and forced to go on a journery and protect a monk

Macaque only wanted to save him but the other wasn't thinking straight

You could say Wukong wasn't able to think at all

The circlet was crushing him , the pain was unberable , and the whispers and words of heaven forcing him to eliminate the enemy made him deaf , his state made him blind to who his enemy was until it was to late

When Wukong broke free from the pain and realized who he was fighting against , he could only watch as Macaque's body , his long time partner , dissolved in a cloud of black smoke and ash

Not knowing that Macaque was still alive , and that he just broke the vessel he came to his world with , Wukong screamed so loud the heavens could hear his cries as if they were right next to him

Wukong would have stayed there grieving until the end of time but he had a journery he was forced to finish

His companions tried to cheer him up or help with his mourning with support but what they didn't know was that it would only get worse unless Macaque came back to Wukong

But Macaque didn't want to , he woke up in his own world , but instead of being glad at being alive he was overcomed by sorrow , fear and anger because of Wukong's actions

He didn't understand what happened to lead Wukong to almost kill him but he was too scared to find out so he never tried to use a vessel again to go to the other world

Macaque thought it would be the end of it all but he didn't know

It was only the beginning.

How MK met Rumble and Savage in my Twin shadows Au

MK:Hey Mac-*notices two unknown monkeys in Mac's dojo* uh- who are you?

Rumble: I'm Rumble

Savage: and I'm Savage

MK: ok cool did you see another monkey around here? he's black like you just taller and broodier

Twins:Yes

MK: cool where is he?

Rumble: you're seeing him dumbass

MK:*sweats* what do you mean? I don't see him- and I'm not a dumbass

Savage: yes you are kid

MK: That's mean , you shouldn't call someone dumb without a reason , also where are your parents? it's obvious Macaque isn't here and I can't just leave you here alone

Rumble: never had any

MK:*flinches* sorry- okay then I will take you with me to Pigsy until I figure out what to do with you two

Savage: can we get noodles?

MK: I can ask Pigsy but I think you'll be fine

Rumble: then what are you waiting for? lead the way

MK:sheesh rude much?

Savage: let's go go go Go!

What I would like Macaque to say to Wukong's face in a fanfic where after Mac gets revived he goes "Fuck him , I'm going to enjoy my second life without ever seeing him"

Wukong:*questioning/yelling about what Macaque is planning and that he doesn't believe he isn't plotting something against him*

Macaque:*tired of Wukong's bullshit* "Listen here you egotistical prick it may shock you but my life doesn't revole around you

You're not worth it , you aren't special , I have other people I hate , do you see me actively trying to kill every person I hate? No? That's because I have better things to do with my life

And honestly I don't want to spend the rest of my life trying to kill you , which is almost impossible , when I could use the time and efforts for something more useful

Do I still hate you? Yes

Do I want you dead? Yes

Will I ever try? No , you're not worth the effort and I honestly don't care about any interaction with you ever because while I hate you I prefer to ignore your existence so I save my sanity against your idiocy

Now if you will excuse me I was literally just trying to get my coffee before you interrupted me with your nonsense"

Wukong:*processing**realizing**Offended gasp**starts fistfight*

Macaque:*drops coffee*"Oh for fuck's sake"*punches Wukong in retaliation*

Ask: "In that context. The clone could have been the one to kill Mac in the past. Does wukong gain information from his clones like in Naruto? or do they just gain their own personality like porty mk"

Answer to @sasunaru22fy about my previous post

Wukong's clones have all the memories of the og! Wukong up until being summoned then the clones make their own memories , the og! Wukong has no way of gaining the clones memories and usually just orders them to tell him everything but even then the more troublesome clones can lie so og!Wukong is careful about summoning his least troublesome clones for information gathering and protection

Macaque was one of them and the first to became a full time existing being

If you're implying that the second Wukong(the clone) technically killed Mac and should have the same opinion of him as og! Wukong because they have the same memories then it's partly true but not really

The clone could also be said to technically haven't killed Mac because he didn't phisically did it , it was og! Wukong, and clones gain their own personality and opinions , like Mac , so they have a different view on the events

If you're implying that a clone was the one to originally kill Mac then no , it was og! Wukong , the only full time clone at the time was Mac

The second Wukong came to be only because Wukong got lazy after sealing Dbk and training Mk so accidentaly using the same clone multiple times made him a full time clone

Clones can become full time beings only if you leave them summoned for a long time and/or often until they can get enough strenght to exist on their own and will be harder to poof and then they will not poof at all and you will have to unlive them to get rid of them

I don't know if I did it right or not , at least it looks somewhat good

I literally used Airbrush until I found the right violets/purples that blended in somewhat well

Now to find out how to shade on something more complex like an Oc

I just had my first cookie dream, I was Caramel Choux Cookie

(I don't know why I was her, I ignore her usually)

and I missed my friends but they were dead so I was sad but a cookie give me a Mashroom

(that became a rainbow cube later in the dream, dream logic right guys?)

that depending on where I bite I grow big or little

(I don't know why it's an Alice in Wonderland inspired dream)

then I appear in the Town Square

(not the in-game one but literally the in real life one of where I live)

and I embrace Black Raisin and Street Urchin in joy

(I don't know why Black Raisin was there or my friend, I was confused in the dream too)

while the rainbow cube was teasing me with his presence in my sight I explain to my friends's questions about how I am there, and I explain that I missed them and that I had a time limit otherwise I would have been stuck with them

(the time limit thing was inspired from the Mexican culture of the day of the death I think, I saw an animated movie years ago and if you remained in the afterlife too long you get stuck so it's something from the movie)

But then... my phone woke me up with a spam call

I was hugging Black Raisin and she was so soft and you wake me up with such a loud ringtone that I jumped from my bed

I'm so curious of how the dream could have ended now I'm disappointed

Unfinished drawing practise , I'm trying to figure out how other artist shade so well and I'm failing , can someone give me advice?